Thread: Teen titans sequentials.

Little fixes Still hate the building. Will have to deal with that later Senk

No... now your overthinking... There was nothing wrong with your composition or layout the first time around, the first panel is fine, Ravens actions were good and the idea of the couple being jostled was perfect... for me the big issue is with the couple, becuase your lost what your strength is, your line of action. The hostest is way better this time out, good action and good LOA, but you cut off the couple, where all the activity -and for...

Well, all of these are impressive. I also was impressed with the first page but now with the 2nd and 3rd, I understand what is going on better. It's better storytelling.

Nice, clean work, Consumer. Two things: One, check the face on the head in panel 2. The features aren't really aligned correctly. It may be they're too big for the head itself, I'm not sure. Two, while the clothing works, pay more attention to the way folds actually work and the way they stretch across arms and legs and so on as they move. Once again, this page is nicely done. A good realization from the thumbnails you...

The cloud effect in panel 3 really helped the story telling.

Excellent! Great improvements to panel 3 and 4. I think panel1 was better before. The perspective on the building is a bit off, and its very square in the second version. As if it was made of legos. And its so zoomed in, there isn't really a good sense of location.

Really good stuff! I liked the first version and I can see now that the second one is even better! Congratulations!

Really big fan of your work since Chris Stevens introduced me to it recently....I think that first panel is just in need of some solid lights and darks...(the ceiling for example)..to ground everything down...Love your work and dig your site. J.