Thread: Striptease act of basic human needs

Envie, thank you very much. Do you still think that the word "show" can fit in the context? Can my interpretation go?

I agree with Var18. The metaphor is contained in the word striptease , and without that word, the entire phrase is rendered useless. If you could explain to us why you want to re-write this sentence, maybe we would be able to help you. But to be honest, I think that if you are going to re-write it, you might as well just delete it entirely.

I think that the metaphor is doubly apt not only because it present the idea of "stripping" away the finer and more pleasant aspects of humans and the subsequent revelation of baser human drives but because it suggests that this will be a prurient and almost lurid display, salacious and depraved.

I wouldn't use "show". Don't know to explain why. Maybe "demonstration". "Display"? "Sample"? "Glimpse"?

Quote: Originally Posted by chopin7 Envie, thank you very much. Do you still think that the word "show" can fit in the context? Can my interpretation go? I think striptease act works best for the reasons envie de voyager mentioned. I think the reason that the character says "striptease act" is not because the situation is like the "show" part of a striptease act, but rather the...

I agree with Var18. The metaphor is contained in the word striptease , and without that word, the entire phrase is rendered useless. If you could explain to us why you want to re-write this sentence, maybe we would be able to help you. But to be honest, I think that if you are going to re-write it, you might as well just delete it entirely.