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Thanks for the comment. Yeah... I would have prefered 8000 lifepoints as well, but 4000 allows for my "style" to work better. I prefer more descriptive, intricate duels, instead of the vast amount of stories that have OTK's left and right. And because of that, it tends to take longer to write, it itself is longer, and making it 8000 lifepoints would probably drag the chapter(s) on too long. And it gets a bit stale after...

My first fanfic! So here is "Dueling down in Drakoneon" __________________________________________________ Chapter 1 Jokas stared out of the window at the back of the train, as it bumped its way down the tracks, getting closer to Drakoneon City with each passing moment. Drakoneon City was the place every duelist wanted to be; it had the best card shops, the toughest competition and huge numbers of fans. Jokas was on his way...

Well, if I hadn't already read it...

You used the word 'and' multiple times in the same sentence a couple of times, messing with your flow. Also, you stuck a comma after 'I summon' at least once, which is something I hate. I'm just nitpicking, though. Bravo (though I prefer it when duels start at 8000LP).

I was planning on going to bed now, but i saw your story was updated, and thought that could wait another ten minutes. I think your story does have potential, and your established a good start. I usually frown upon not having a bit of personality description within the first 2 chapters, but i think you still pullsed it off well, and showed how he acts in such situations. i'll be hoping we get to know him better in the next episode Thanks...